Class Writing Lesson

I thought it was very useful when a chosen student provided a paragraph from her first draft of her Literary Analysis Piece. I have been in several English classes where teachers provide examples that are completely irrelevant to pieces we are working on at the time. Those situations provided no relevant aid and many times made me even more confused. Seeing how a relevant paragraph could be revised into a "less wordy" form created a clear image of what is expected for this assignment